Because you represent Ransom Riggs' series, I am seeking representation for THE COMFORT BAN, a Middle Grade urban fantasy. When the federal government tried to stimulate the economy by banning certain luxury items, they didn't understand they abandoned a whole society with no notion how to care for themselves -- the stuffed animals.
Never start a sentence with "because", because it's a conjunctive word used to link two relative phrases. "As you represent" is a better term to use. Before you begin your synopsis, take a new paragraph.
Plot issue: why would banning certain luxury items stimulate the economy? Also, if the explanation is rather academic, or hinges on a certain level of economic understanding, you might want to revise your target market. 8-12 year olds generally aren't economically savvy.
How "luxury" are stuffed animals? Perhaps it would be easier just to say "the government, who hated fun because fun was bad for the economy, decided to ban all the stuffed animals". This is giving me a 1984, Animal Farm sort of vibe already.
Strong name. Nice.
the teddy bear missed this, so after he climbs out of a trash bag, he must reunite with his family -- the little girl he calls Mom and her parents.
This is going to get confusing, if the little girl is called "mom".
With Teddy teaching him the ways of the world and young Phil out to protect all stuffed animals, all three teddy bears are doomed, except for one over-powering instinct -- the need to love.
This is contrived. You build up this sentence in a light that screams "challenge afoot", then resign the three teddies to doom. Also, if Teddy is a teddy, and there are other teddies, it's going to get confusing. It would be better to say "With Alfie teaching him in the ways of the world, and Phil the Zealot out to protect all stuffed animals, the three teddy bears must utilize their most powerful resource -- the will to love -- to overcome all the challenges they face".
Ever fearful of humans throwing them away to spend their lives in the dreaded dump, where dogs and rats tear stuffies apart, by night, they join with other stuffed animals to save more stuffies and find enough to eat. By day, they must trust each other like family until they go home.
Why by day and not by night? Why not just "They band together with other stuffed animals and set out to save the rest from destruction. To accomplish this, they must trust each other like family. But can they?"
Will Spaulding find home?
Perfect ending for a synopsis. Questions are great.
The Comfort Ban is set in Philadelphia and is 47,000 words. It is as realistic as Watership Down, if one can call a novel about talking, thinking animals realistic.
This is not for you to decide, this is for the publisher to decide. I'd actually remove everything after "47,000 words".