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Now you're getting above average range. Great improvement.
Suggestions:
-- I love the objective now, except for one little nitpick on it. Isn't "cost-savings" a synonym for "efficiency?" I'd drop "cost-savings."
-- Drop forward slash. In the first sentence replace it with "and," plus uncap "develop." In the Skills section replace it with commas, except in the case when the slash really is part of the abbreviation. (EPROM / EEPROM) However, get rid of the spaces added before and after your slash. EPROM/EEPROM. Grammatically speaking there are no spaces around slashes.
-- Be more specific. Truly tell what you did. Because I can't speak tech-talk anymore, (and was at toddler level only because hubby had to learn the words himself), I'm going to put these words in CP3O language. Uncle Skywalker asked CP3O if he could speak binary...blahblahblah. CP3O, never to lose a moment to brag, never said "Yes." He said he worked on blahdeblahblahblah which is very similar to your evaporators." In like kind you really did do something specific more than once. Tell the specifics, and anyone in the know, (like Uncle Skywalker), will translate that into, "Well, he created a program to make the widget work in XYZ business, so he can create the similar program to work in our facility to make our widgety work too." They want to know what you can do to see if your skills are adaptable in their environment. If you become too general, they won't know what you can do in their environment.
-- If the sentence works the same without a word(s), delete the word(s_. For instance: "but also," "at every level," (particular because I think you covered every level), "Same" as in "Another version of the same program," "both," and "the following exhibits...." (For that last one, doesn't the whole resume exhibit that?)
-- I don't quite get that part. I mean I get you want to boast on your DOS abilities from back-in-the-day, but it sticks out like wearing a plaid suit. It's not like the rest of that section, and it should be like the rest of that section. If you delete the paragraph before that, delete the paragraph after that, and add the ~ thingy at the beginning of that, it will fit like the rest, and it does give good hints how long you've been at this as well as, (I'm assuming, although I really don't understand the lingo to know for sure), you are showing what those two paragraphs are telling. You don't need to tell, if you show.
-- Why mention oscilloscope and Cadence Virtuoso design suite more than once? Bring it up at the better choice.
-- Since the Personal doesn't say anything that anyone else wouldn't say, (even the dishonest and lazy), I'd consider removing it. Let your objective, skills, and experience do the talking for you.
-- Nope. nope, nope nope. Education! Since you went to for more schooling after high school, no way, no how tell about when you graduated high school. It's just not done, it's a rookie mistake, AND your letting them in on how old you are, ya old coot. (LOL, you're younger than I am.) Companies do discriminate on age, and you're the age they discriminate on. They're seeing, "By the time we get him to doing the job right, he'll retire." OR they're seeing, "He's no kid so will expect more pay. We can get a younger guy for much less." Never give them leverage on deciding who you are as a person before meeting you. They will meet you and figure out you're no spring chick, but they've chosen to meet you from your skills, not for your age.
-- Likewise, a bit iffy on telling you went to a technology institute. After Y2K was fixed, the computer techie filed was over saturated. Before then, they hired computer techies for six-figures, because those were the people who already proved their wroth. Since it was flooded, after Y2K, they had the choice of whoever they wanted. AND they could pay much less. AND they could get pickier. Instead of hiring people who developed what we know as the computer today from scratch, they hired recent college graduates with BSs for $25,000-$35,000 to start. No idea if they're still discriminating like that anymore, but you really do not want to tell them your education either. Let your experience talk for itself.
-- And, again. I really am getting why you didn't go chronological on your resume. You've got gaps. So why are you showing the gaps with previous work now? DOS! DOS tells how long you've been doing this. Your employment history tells your titles. Up to you if you want to keep that. (I wouldn't, unless the titles mean something to them. And, again, don't count on me, because I don't know what they mean. lol) BUT, if you do keep them, skip the months. Just go with the years. Because look what happens if you just go with the years. 2014-2017. You've been working the last three years. At the interview, feel free to tell them you got laid off/let go last month. No particular reason to say that here. And look at the years without dates as a whole.
2014 - 2017
2013 - 2014
2011 - 2012
2010
Tada! It tells the truth. You've worked every year for the last seven years. Not the whole year, but you consistently worked in this field. The rest, if needed, can be explained in the interview too.
As for 2009 and back? Problem. 2009 was a bad year for you, so you didn't work in the field. I don't see a need to go back past 2010. You are from the days of DOS, which is what they want to know. "How long have you been working in IT?"
Once people get to a certain age, (and you're there even though I really still think you're a kid. Somebody has to! Dad still thinks I'm a kid. lol), you don't have to go back to the beginning. Go back enough years to prove your worth.
As for the hardware and software part? Can't help you. I barely recognize those words as English, so I have no ability to tell you if it's done right other than the front-dash comment above.
You're getting there though. Before I thought you could use a resume writer. Now I think it's possible you can do this without one. I suspect after your next try, I'll be up to strictly nitpicking.
Suggestions:
-- I love the objective now, except for one little nitpick on it. Isn't "cost-savings" a synonym for "efficiency?" I'd drop "cost-savings."
-- Drop forward slash. In the first sentence replace it with "and," plus uncap "develop." In the Skills section replace it with commas, except in the case when the slash really is part of the abbreviation. (EPROM / EEPROM) However, get rid of the spaces added before and after your slash. EPROM/EEPROM. Grammatically speaking there are no spaces around slashes.
-- Be more specific. Truly tell what you did. Because I can't speak tech-talk anymore, (and was at toddler level only because hubby had to learn the words himself), I'm going to put these words in CP3O language. Uncle Skywalker asked CP3O if he could speak binary...blahblahblah. CP3O, never to lose a moment to brag, never said "Yes." He said he worked on blahdeblahblahblah which is very similar to your evaporators." In like kind you really did do something specific more than once. Tell the specifics, and anyone in the know, (like Uncle Skywalker), will translate that into, "Well, he created a program to make the widget work in XYZ business, so he can create the similar program to work in our facility to make our widgety work too." They want to know what you can do to see if your skills are adaptable in their environment. If you become too general, they won't know what you can do in their environment.
-- If the sentence works the same without a word(s), delete the word(s_. For instance: "but also," "at every level," (particular because I think you covered every level), "Same" as in "Another version of the same program," "both," and "the following exhibits...." (For that last one, doesn't the whole resume exhibit that?)
-- I don't quite get that part. I mean I get you want to boast on your DOS abilities from back-in-the-day, but it sticks out like wearing a plaid suit. It's not like the rest of that section, and it should be like the rest of that section. If you delete the paragraph before that, delete the paragraph after that, and add the ~ thingy at the beginning of that, it will fit like the rest, and it does give good hints how long you've been at this as well as, (I'm assuming, although I really don't understand the lingo to know for sure), you are showing what those two paragraphs are telling. You don't need to tell, if you show.
-- Why mention oscilloscope and Cadence Virtuoso design suite more than once? Bring it up at the better choice.
-- Since the Personal doesn't say anything that anyone else wouldn't say, (even the dishonest and lazy), I'd consider removing it. Let your objective, skills, and experience do the talking for you.
-- Nope. nope, nope nope. Education! Since you went to for more schooling after high school, no way, no how tell about when you graduated high school. It's just not done, it's a rookie mistake, AND your letting them in on how old you are, ya old coot. (LOL, you're younger than I am.) Companies do discriminate on age, and you're the age they discriminate on. They're seeing, "By the time we get him to doing the job right, he'll retire." OR they're seeing, "He's no kid so will expect more pay. We can get a younger guy for much less." Never give them leverage on deciding who you are as a person before meeting you. They will meet you and figure out you're no spring chick, but they've chosen to meet you from your skills, not for your age.
-- Likewise, a bit iffy on telling you went to a technology institute. After Y2K was fixed, the computer techie filed was over saturated. Before then, they hired computer techies for six-figures, because those were the people who already proved their wroth. Since it was flooded, after Y2K, they had the choice of whoever they wanted. AND they could pay much less. AND they could get pickier. Instead of hiring people who developed what we know as the computer today from scratch, they hired recent college graduates with BSs for $25,000-$35,000 to start. No idea if they're still discriminating like that anymore, but you really do not want to tell them your education either. Let your experience talk for itself.
-- And, again. I really am getting why you didn't go chronological on your resume. You've got gaps. So why are you showing the gaps with previous work now? DOS! DOS tells how long you've been doing this. Your employment history tells your titles. Up to you if you want to keep that. (I wouldn't, unless the titles mean something to them. And, again, don't count on me, because I don't know what they mean. lol) BUT, if you do keep them, skip the months. Just go with the years. Because look what happens if you just go with the years. 2014-2017. You've been working the last three years. At the interview, feel free to tell them you got laid off/let go last month. No particular reason to say that here. And look at the years without dates as a whole.
2014 - 2017
2013 - 2014
2011 - 2012
2010
Tada! It tells the truth. You've worked every year for the last seven years. Not the whole year, but you consistently worked in this field. The rest, if needed, can be explained in the interview too.
As for 2009 and back? Problem. 2009 was a bad year for you, so you didn't work in the field. I don't see a need to go back past 2010. You are from the days of DOS, which is what they want to know. "How long have you been working in IT?"
Once people get to a certain age, (and you're there even though I really still think you're a kid. Somebody has to! Dad still thinks I'm a kid. lol), you don't have to go back to the beginning. Go back enough years to prove your worth.
As for the hardware and software part? Can't help you. I barely recognize those words as English, so I have no ability to tell you if it's done right other than the front-dash comment above.
You're getting there though. Before I thought you could use a resume writer. Now I think it's possible you can do this without one. I suspect after your next try, I'll be up to strictly nitpicking.
