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I decided today to start writing a book, and I completed chapter 1. Can I get some input, thank you!
Chapter One
Before I Was Born
I was sleeping, and I could hear the merriment of others ring through the air. Then there was silence, and it woke me up. When I opened my eyes, I found myself laying at the base of a magnificent tree. I searched around as I sat there, miles, and miles of billowy beautiful clouds. There was no one in sight, I was alone. My eyes started shedding tears, and I grew quite sad. As I sobbed away, along came a boy, about the same size I was. He asked me, "Why are you crying?" I was surprised, "Where did you come from?" He said, "Over there!" I was like, "No way, I looked over there!" As I looked in that direction, and still just seen miles of clouds. When I turned back around, the boy was now kneeling down, looking down in a deep stare. Curious, I knelt down beside him. When I looked down, there was a hole in the clouds, that exposed Earth. I said, "Wow, how pretty!" He started telling me that God created it, and how it was a gift to his children. I was excited, and told him "Wow, I want to be one of God's children!" He continued to tell me also about God's son Jesus, and how he went to Earth to help God's children, because they were in danger. I exclaimed, "From what?" He told me there was an enemy, that rebelled against God, and ways trying to get his children to rebel too. Then it was as if we were looking into a high powered magnifying glass, and we zoomed in to where I could see people. Some things were a joy to see, but than I also seen horrible things. When I seen the things that I did, the boy would explain it to me. Showing me why Jesus had to come to Earth, and I told him "I want to help!" That was when all of a sudden, I was falling. It was as like I was in a vacuum cleaner, and the light I was in, grew dark. I was scared, as there was total blackness. I was know in my mother's womb!
Chapter One
Before I Was Born
I was sleeping, and I could hear the merriment of others ring through the air. Then there was silence, and it woke me up. When I opened my eyes, I found myself laying at the base of a magnificent tree. I searched around as I sat there, miles, and miles of billowy beautiful clouds. There was no one in sight, I was alone. My eyes started shedding tears, and I grew quite sad. As I sobbed away, along came a boy, about the same size I was. He asked me, "Why are you crying?" I was surprised, "Where did you come from?" He said, "Over there!" I was like, "No way, I looked over there!" As I looked in that direction, and still just seen miles of clouds. When I turned back around, the boy was now kneeling down, looking down in a deep stare. Curious, I knelt down beside him. When I looked down, there was a hole in the clouds, that exposed Earth. I said, "Wow, how pretty!" He started telling me that God created it, and how it was a gift to his children. I was excited, and told him "Wow, I want to be one of God's children!" He continued to tell me also about God's son Jesus, and how he went to Earth to help God's children, because they were in danger. I exclaimed, "From what?" He told me there was an enemy, that rebelled against God, and ways trying to get his children to rebel too. Then it was as if we were looking into a high powered magnifying glass, and we zoomed in to where I could see people. Some things were a joy to see, but than I also seen horrible things. When I seen the things that I did, the boy would explain it to me. Showing me why Jesus had to come to Earth, and I told him "I want to help!" That was when all of a sudden, I was falling. It was as like I was in a vacuum cleaner, and the light I was in, grew dark. I was scared, as there was total blackness. I was know in my mother's womb!