The River Out of the Land of Darkness

One lantern with its faintest flutter
veils darkness with its shimmer.
Your worries form a quiet mutter,
fearing it's turning dimmer.

It's not an easy path you've chosen,
learning to trust the quiet pledge.
Through valleys unknown dark and frozen,
yearning to see the river's edge.

It is still darkness you keep sensing,
but beyond it reaches your longing.
Not knowing when it's all commencing,
you thirst to find yourself belonging.

Move through a wilderness so stark
with thorns and thistles skirting path.
Ship's crosstree invites to embark,
to sail outside this place of wrath.

Very thoughtful and artistic!

Of course the message comes through like a picture!

Thank you for your feedback. I'm still quite new to writing poetry, so I really appreciate your opinion as it may help to calibrate my own. (Which is why I also welcome criticism.)

Thank you for your feedback. I'm still quite new to writing poetry, so I really appreciate your opinion as it may help to calibrate my own. (Which is why I also welcome criticism.)

Yes very good, reading it again!

More please!

I already posted another one. It just has to be approved by the mods. I hope you like that one too (but again, please be honest if you don't).